Writing a thesis statement
Need to work out a relevant thesis statement for my assignment.
What do you think about this one? “The social prejudice against Afro-Americans has a highly negative impact on the everyday lives of the latter.”
The subject’s good, though the thesis should be improved, I think. As for me, it sounds too general. What do you mean by “a highly negative impact”? Don’t you think that “highly” might seem a bit exaggerated?
It’s not that I am trying to criticise, I just want to help you make the thesis more straight to the point.
Here are some tips on how to improve it:
make it clear;
follow a logic structure;
choose the words that intrigue the readers;
let the readers get a complete idea of what your paper is going to be about.
Is your main message that Afro-Americans are a disadvantaged group due to the unjust social treatment? Anyway, it’s up to YOU to decide what your thesis statement is to look like.
Hope, you’ll use the tips to make it perfect!
Sounds fine to me)
The society has numerous prejudice against Afro-Americans that complicates largely the lives of the latter.
Sounds too complicated, make it shorter and more coherent.
African-Americans’ vision of life standards contradicts with the social perception of traditional values?
try to make to make it more concise, like the life of Afro-Americans is highly influenced by social narrow-mindness)