THESIS! Urgent!

I am writing an essay about texting and driving.
This is my introduction & thesis: Today the US faces a critical problem of texting while driving.
Being distracted, drivers, teenagers mainly, cause many car accidents.
As technology develops, more distractions that result in accidents occur.
Comment, please!

2 Answers

  1. I’m not a professional but I think it would be better if you add some data. Search for statistics related to accidents that happened because of texting while driving or smth like that. Maybe it is the main cause of accidents, so you can support this idea.
    Still, I’m not sure.
    Think about it.

    Anusika Anusika Answered
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  2. Narrow it. When writing about technology, you mean phones but not all devices. Many of them reduce accidents and never cause. Good luck!

    Iriny Iriny Answered
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