Help me with thesis

Hi, my paper is about Elton John and proves that he is underestimated.
As I needed arguments I wrote that he deserves more recognition than he gained. Still, in the first paragraph I started to describe how famous he was.
I know that the body paragraphs should support my thesis, but it seems to be not so, am I right?
In the conclusion I was going to write that people who achieved success are not always valued by public.
Can I use this thesis or it should be changed?
Have no idea how to deal with it.
Help, please

3 Answers

  1. Find some arguments at first and then write a thesis.
    What you have is a mess.

    Harry Harry Answered
  2. say that he was overestimated and you’ll have no problems!!!

    Chang Chao Chang Chao Answered
  3. It’s too vague. What variables you used to measure how valued he was?
    Try to focus on them, you can find a way out.
    Consider the number of records sold, the price of tickets, opinions of critics and other musicians, fans, imitators, etc.
    Start with this and then adapt your thesis

    Anaya Anaya Answered